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Jet: I'll leave the room. You do what you want.
Gretchen: I don’t know what to do. I love you but I like him.
Jet : I don’t want to feel this way anymore, you have to choose me or him. <comma splice< I don’t want to be in the middle. <good job of developing conflictg
Gretchen Remains quiet and scared.
Jet: Are you going to choose or do you want me to choose for you?
Gretchen: Give me more time. I don’t like being in this situation.
Jet: Your breaking my heart. I love you with all my heart. Can you tell me what I did wrong?
Gretchen: Your perfect. You didn’t do anything wrong. It's my fault. Can you give me time?
Jet: I can't give you time because each second, minute, and hour that passes by, I feel like my heart is dying inside.
Jet: Stands up and walks towards the door. <is Jet a man or woman?
Gretchen: Don’t leave me. Please!
Jet turns around and looks into Gretchen's eyes
Jet: What do you want me to do? You have feelings for someone else and I'm suppose to wait? Your breaking my heart. Those four years are down the drain. I feel like I wasted my life being with you.
Gretchen: It's not a waste. I want to be with you but I don’t know what to do. You’re my everything. I need you.
Jet: Your not acting like it. I'm not going to wait for you and let you break my heart. Your hurting my feelings.
Gretchen: I don’t want to hurt your feelings . I love you baby. Please don’t leave me.
Jet: After all we been through, you're going to cheat and go behind my back? I never did anything to you. I wanted to marry you and this is how your repay me?
Gretchen remind silent.
Jet: I wanted to spend my whole life with you. Grown old and die together. I can't stand it anymore.
Gretchen: I love you with all my heart. I don’t want you to leave.
Jet: It's too late, your heart doesn’t belong to me anymore. <comma splice< I will always remember you my love. Good bye.
Jet turns around and opens the door.
Gretchen: When will I see you again?
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